高二英语读后续写（）
一、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At first, Surrell didn't see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors' home. He and his wife were just having a dinner in their own house in Allentown, Pennsylvania, when they heard someone screaming, “The house is on fire!” He went to investigate. That's when he saw two women and a girl crazily at a loss on their porch (走廊). It was his neighbor's house.
“The baby's inside there!” one of the women cried. Though the fire department had been called,Surrell, then 64, instinctively(本能地) ran inside. “The baby” was 8-year-old Tiara Roberts, who always called him Uncle Surrell. She was the woman's granddaughter and a playmate of Surrell's three youngest kids, 8, 10, and 12. The other two on the porch were Tiara's aunt and cousin.
Entering the burning house was like running into “a bucket of black paint”. The thick smoke caused Surrell to walk blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible for him to breathe. He felt his throat and lungs burned, and every blink stung(蛰) his eyes. The conditions would have been very dangerous for anyone, but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease(慢性阻塞性肺病) and was in hospital just half a year ago, they were life-risking.
After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house searching but in vain, he ran outside to catch his breath. “Where is Tiara” he asked desperately.
“The second floor,” her aunt shouted back.
Surrell knew he couldn't hold his breath for long. So he uttered a little prayer, “Well, God, this is it. You got to help me, because I'm not coming out without that little girl.”
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:
Taking a deep health, he went in a second
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Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. _______________________________
【写作思路与分析】
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此题要求根据短文的情节，结合所提供的关键词语以及所续写段落的开头语来进行续写。短文续写可以遵循以下步骤： （一）文本分析
本文叙述了Surrell不顾自己年老体弱，奋不顾身地冲进火海救护邻居小孩Tiara的故事。在阅读文本时，我们要带着when (having a dinner)、where (Surrell's neighbor's home, the second floor, hospital)、who (Surrell, Tiara, Tiara's Grandmother and Tiara's relatives)、what (Fire broke out and Tiara was trapped on the second floor)、why (The house was on fire and the house was full of heavy smoke, Tiara's grandmother and her relatives were crazily at a loss)、how (Surrell dashed into the burning house to save Tiara)去理清文本的内容和故事情节的发展脉络。对于故事的进展，我们要聚焦how (故事情节的发展和故事人物的情感变化)。在梳理故事情节发展的脉络时，我们要把握住三条线索：时空线、故事情节线和情感发展线。 时空线：at first having a dinner, Tiara's grandmother's house on fire, the second floor, hospital。
故事情节线：①Surrell在家与妻子一起吃饭时，听到邻居因家里失火而发出的尖叫声。②Tiara的奶奶、姑姑和表姐(妹)站在家里的走廊上因害怕而不知所措。③Surrell不顾自己年老体弱（患有慢性阻塞性肺病），奋不顾身地冲进火海营救深陷火海地Tiara。④Tiara被成功营救了吗Surrell和Tiara被烧伤了吗Surrell在医院苏醒后康复得怎样邻居们对他的英勇行为又是怎么评价这些信息和内容是我们在下文续写中要交待的。
情感发展线：Tiara奶奶和亲戚们对房子起火惊吓得手足无措，Surrell得知情况后奋不顾身地去救护Tiara，从没有救出Tiara时的焦躁和救出之后躺在医院的坦然。
在这一环节，我们要聚焦原作者在文本中所使用人物的肢体语言、心理活动和脸部表情来描写人物的情感，表达人物的思想。我们尽可能仿效作者的写作的格调，遵循读后续写的协同原则来完成自己的故事续写。
（二）下划线词和续写首句解读 1. 下划线词的解读
已知文本中的10个下划线词为：Surrell, Tiara, uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous, hospital, outside, the second floor。根据这10个下划线的词，我们可以进行粗略地分类，然后进行详细地分析： Characters 人物类 Time and places时空类 类
①人物类中的“Surrell与Tiara”是本文主人公。故事情节的发展自始至终都是围绕着作者“Surrell”与Tiara之间展开，所以Surrell, Tiara都是必选词汇。Surrell与Tiara是邻居，Surrell
} Surrell, Tiara hospital, outside, the second floor Plot development故事情节发展uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous
对可爱、礼貌、乖巧的Tiara很是喜欢，于是不顾一切地冲进火海救护Tiara。Surrell在救护中受伤，Tiara和她的家人心存感恩，在医院一直守护Surrell，一直到他苏醒。这故事情节反映了邻里之间互爱互助，关系和谐的社区生活。
②时空类中的hospital, outside和the second floor是故事情节发展至高潮的必需地点。Surrell冲进火海，将Tiara抱出外面，可他自己却受伤送进医院抢救。因此，hospital, outside和the second floor在续写故事中都可以定为必选词汇。
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③故事情节发展类中的uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous都是故事情节的发展与
推进词汇，uncle称谓体现了Surrell与Tiara 之间的亲密关系，smoke增添了Surrell救护Tiara的难度，burned交代了Surrell在救护中可能被烧伤某一人体部位，lungs是Surrell救护Tiara前身体不适部位，而他却在身体不适的情况下义无反顾地冲进火海救护Tina，体现了他的无畏和勇敢，dangerous是当时救护时的处境，但故事的发展可以通过其他形式的渲染，而不必直接点出危险的处境。因此，下划线uncle, smoke, burned, lungs等词都可以定为续写的必选或可选词汇。
2. 首句的解读
从续写第二段首句Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.可知，Surrell在救护Tiara过程中受伤住院了，结合续写第一段首句“Taking a deep health, he went in a second time.的提示，我们可以推断出，Surrell第一次冲进火海并没有将Tiara营救出来。他第二次营救是否会成功 Surrell受伤严重吗Tiara烧伤了没有Surrell受伤后大家会有什么反应呢实施急救还是送往医院这些内容都是我们需要在第一段续写中要交代的。
从续写第二段首句Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.信息中，“我们可以推断，Surrell伤得不轻。对于Surrell的伤情，Tiara一家会有什么感恩举措，尤其是被救的当事人Tiara这些都是我们第二段续写中要交代的。
（三）写作思路微技能之G—N策略
根据语言学家Jeanette Gundelean提出的Given-New 策略，我们可以基于原文本和首句（Given information）提供的信息，采用围绕中心词问一些相关问题，然后回答这些问题（New information）的方法，拓展我们的思路和角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。 在第一段的续写中，围绕着两个段首句，我们可以尝试问这些问题： Q1: Did Surrell succeed in saving Tiara How？
Q2: What had happened to Surrell And what about Tiara？
Q3: What might be Tiara's grandmother and her relatives' reaction？ 然后进行详细地回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段文章：
Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The house was full of smoke. He ran in the dark, and finally made it to the second floor. He could hardly breathe. “Tiara, where are you” he cried. All he could hear was the sound of burning wood. Then a screaming cry, calling Uncle Surrell, came. He quickly crawled toward the sound. Finally, he touched
something. It was Tiara. He pulled her on his back and said, “I've got you.” He ran out of the burning house, but he fell on the ground of the porch
在第2段的写作中，围绕段首句“Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.”我们可以尝试问这些问题：
Q1. What did Surrell find when he woke up What did he ask？
Q2. What might Tiara/Tiara's grandmother have said and done in the hospital when she/they went to visit Surrell？
Q3. What might be Surrell's reaction to Tiara's/Tiara's grandmother's gratitude？ 然后进行详细地回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段文章：
Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. When he woke up, he first cared about Tiara's safety. On hearing Tiara was all right, he smiled, coughing. Having suffered severe burns, he spent another two weeks in the hospital. Tiara recovered soon and was released from the hospital after two days. She went to visit Surrell, telling him stories and singing to him songs she learned from school. “Thank you for saving my life,Uncle Surrell.” Surrell sat up, patting her shoulder. “It's a small price to pay and it's my pleasure to do that. You are my angel.” Surrell said in a low voice. （四）润色成篇。
在续写的过程中要注意续写段落与所给短文及开头语之间的衔接。思路要清晰，情节要合理、完整，同时要注意使用的形容词、副词、人物的肢体语言和脸部表情来描写人物的情感，同时辅以环境描写，以及运用非谓语动词、复合句、倒装句等来表达人物的思想的写作手法。如：
The smoke made it impossible for him to see the surroundings and he felt his way on the second floor, calling Tiara his lovely girl desperately and repeatedly.
It was so dark inside that it was hard to find the stairs. Several minutes later, he found the way and got to the second floor, where the flame was more fierce.
“Tiara, where are you” he shouted desperately, waiting for the response hopefully. Fortunately, a soft but hopeful voice emerged. “Uncle, Surrell, I'm in my bedroom.” Without thinking twice, he dashed towards the bedroom, crashed into the door and carried the little girl outside.
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With all his strength, Surrell carried the little girl in his arms and rushed out of the house,
and this was the last thing he remembered.
“Thank you for saving my life, my dear uncle.”Tiara said in a sweet voice, kissing him on the cheek.
Seeing Surrell, Tiara's grandmother couldn't hold back her tears of gratitude. “Thank you, Surrell. Without your timely rescue, my granddaughter would have died in the fire.” She said, holding his hand tightly.
Looking at the little girl he rescued, he felt that all he did was worth it. 参考答案1： Paragraph 1:
Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The house was full of heavy smoke. The smoke made it impossible for him to see the surroundings and he just felt his way, calling Tiara his lovely girl repeatedly. “Tiara, where are you” he cried desperately. But all he could hear was the popping of burning wood. Just at moment, a soft but hopeful voice came. “Uncle,Surrell, I'm in my bedroom.” Without thinking twice, he dashed towards the bedroom, crashed into the door, pulled the little girl up and carried her outside. That was the last thing he remembered.
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Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. As he woke up, what he first cared about was Tiara's safety. Hearing Tiara was all right, he smiled, coughing and nodding. Having suffered severe burns, he spent another two weeks in the hospital. Tiara recovered soon and was released from the hospital after two days. She and her grandmother went to visit Surrell. Seeing Surrell, Tiara's grandmother couldn't hold back her tears of gratitude. “Thank you, Surrell. Without your timely rescue, my granddaughter would have died in the fire.” She said, holding his hand tightly. “It's a small price to pay and it's my pleasure to do that. Tiaras is my angel.” Surrell held her hand, saying in a hoarse voice.
参考答案2： Paragraph 1:
Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The darkness was overwhelming. He ran blindly in the blackness, and finally made it to the second floor, where he was met by intense heat. He was already out of breath. “Baby girl, where are you” he cried desperately. All he could hear was the popping of burning wood. Then a soft but distinct moan emerged. He quickly crawled toward the sound. Finally, he touched something. A shoe, then an ankle. He pulled Tiara toward him and hugged her tight and said, “Uncle's got you.” The last thing he remembered, he was outside.
Paragraph 2:
Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. Severe burns suffered and chronic obstructive pulmonary worsened, he spent another two weeks in the hospital. Tiara recovered soon and was released from the hospital after two days. She went to visit Surrell every day,
高二英语续写
