2. 高考读后续写高分技巧
(2018·浙江高考)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm, ” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,
and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper, ” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意: 续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好。
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. __________________
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We had no idea where we were and it got dark.
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练考场审题
Step 1: 精准审题 谋篇布局 文体 时态
记叙文 一般过去时
第一段: 交代故事的背景。介绍了度假的原因和地点 第二段: 简单地介绍了旅途
原文分
第三段: 对在农场的日常活动的简单介绍 析
第四段和续写故事的展开有很大的关系。这一段讲到了如何发生了我和爸爸去骑马的故事。而续写的内容就是在此基础上展开
根据第一段所给首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. 这一句是故事发展的转折点, 可从rabbit出现后带来的反应
写作思扩展开, 可以写马的反应, 也可以写人的反应, 但要注意与第二段首路
句相呼应
第二段首句是We had no idea where we were and it got dark. 这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的叮嘱——不要误了吃晚饭, 可从如何寻路返回
农场去写
Step 2: 头脑风暴 字字珠玉
(1)美词: previous;in vain;at the point of desperation;a faint voice (2)佳句
①Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off .
②Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I.
③What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. Step 3: 斟酌词句 妙笔生花
要点1: 这个出其不意的出场让我的马疯狂地跑起来。 一般表达:
This unexpected appearance made my horse run wildly. 句式升级(定语从句)
This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly.
要点2: 尽管我很害怕, 我努力不(让自己)掉下马来。 一般表达:
Although I was frightened, I tried not to fall off the horse. 句式升级(倒装句)
Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off.
要点3: 我们只能沿着之前的路慢慢走回去。 一般表达:
We could only go back along the previous track slowly. 句式升级(主语从句)
我们所能做的只有沿着之前的路慢慢走回去。
What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. Step 4: 衔接过渡 斐然成篇
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that we got lost.
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didn’t know where the farm house was. What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice from the distance. “It must be Uncle Paul, ” I said. So we cried back with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!
2020年高考英语作文高分素材训练：2.2高考读后续写高分技巧
