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7步成文第五步靓词佳句升级完，衔接顺畅“修一番”
习作的润色主要包括两方面，一是词句的美化，着眼于句子内部；二是语句的衔接，着眼于句子与句子之间、段与段之间。一篇100词左右的文章，几个衔接词看似微不足道，其实不然，缺乏有效衔接的文章就如同缺乏粘合的墙壁一样——松散、易垮。
一、“四档”“五档”差在哪
[典例感悟] (2024·浙江高考写作)假定你是李华，你校英语协会招聘志愿者，接待来访的国外中学生。请你写信应聘，内容包括：
1．口语能力； 2.相关经验； 3.应聘目的。
注意：1.词数80左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
“冤屈的”四档作文(得分11分) Dear Sir/Madam， I've learned that the English Association of our school is now in need of some volunteers to receive foreign students visiting our school. I'm writing to apply to join it, thinking that I'm well qualified for the job. I have developed fluency in spoken English. I have no difficulty communicating with them. I have accumulated related experience by working part-time in a travel agency, accompanying some foreign tourists. I treasure this as a good chance to broaden my perspective as well as improve my spoken English. Looking forward to your reply at your convenience. Yours， Li Hua 升格后的五档作文(得分14分) Dear Sir/Madam， I've learned that the English Association of our school is now in need of some volunteers to receive foreign students visiting our school. I'm writing to apply to join it, thinking that I'm well qualified for the job. For one thing, I have developed fluency in spoken English. As a result, I have no difficulty communicating with them. For another, I have accumulated related experience by working part-time in a travel agency, accompanying some foreign tourists. More importantly, I treasure this as a good chance to broaden my perspective as well as improve my spoken English. Looking forward to your reply at your convenience. Yours， Li Hua 2
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左栏的文章运用了现在分词作状语、宾语从句、非谓语动词等；in need of, be well qualified for, develop fluency in, accumulated, broaden my perspective, as well as等的应名 师 用也恰到好处；文章采用了三段式，分段合理，总体来说是一篇不错的作文。但美中不点 足的是缺少了语句间的连接成分，感觉好像只是一些句子的简单堆砌，使得文章读起来评 稍欠流畅，故勉强归入四档。右栏的作文加上一些连接词后使文章结构紧凑，过渡自然，从而上升了一个档次，从四档跨入了五档。 二、如何由“四档”升“五档”
四档作文与五档作文在衔接过渡方面的差别在于：一个是应用简单的语句间的连接成分；一个是有效地使用了语句间的连接成分。一个“简单”，一个“有效”，凸显写作功底、凸显档次差别。有效地使用语句间的连接成分巧妙地衔接过渡，利用好“起、承、转、合”四种方法使文章流畅自然，是考生书面表达跨进五档线的必备条件。
[常用开头词汇]
表示“起”的词汇常用在段落或文章的开头，用于开篇引出扩展句。常见的词汇有：first, firstly, first of all, at first, in the first place, above all, to begin/start with, today, now, nowadays, at present, currently, recently, generally speaking, according to等。
First, I think everyone needs friends and is eager to get friendship. First of all, we must make full use of every 45-minute lesson.
Nowadays/Recently, people in many big cities are complaining about the heavy traffic. To begin/start with, smoking should be banned in public areas.
Generally speaking, the more you practise, the more skillfully you can write in English. [常用开头句式]
As the proverb says/As the saying goes, “Time is money.”
With the development of the Internet, computers play an important role in people's life.
It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.
There is no denying that successful business lies in a healthy body and mind. It is well-known that an elephant is a very kind and gentle animal. I'm excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine. [满分作文选粹]
Generally speaking, your arrival shouldn't be later than the fixed time.(2024·全国卷Ⅰ
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书面表达)
For one thing, I have developed fluency in spoken English.(2024·浙江高考写作) Now I'm writing to tell you the plan for the next class.(2017·全国卷Ⅰ书面表达) I'm happy to receive your letter and know you're coming to China.(2017·北京高考书面表达)
As is indicated in the graph, the box-office income of Chinese films increased constantly from 2012 to 2015.(2017·江苏高考书面表达)
[常用顺承词汇]
表示“承”的词汇常用于承接主题句或第一个扩展句。常见的词汇有：second/secondly, also, besides, in addition, soon afterwards, after that, what's more, furthermore, moreover, what's worse, still less, to make matters worse, worse still, for example, in other words, especially, particularly, obviously, meanwhile, at the same time等。
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Secondly, we should get up early to memorize idioms and useful expressions. Obviously, a good learning habit can help us to speed up to reach our destinations. Besides, developing a good habit of learning can help you improve your learning effectively.
What's more, good books can help us to develop good characters.
In addition, we shouldn't neglect that everyone wants a friendly and peaceful society. Meanwhile/At the same time, I will regard it as my duty to keep our environment clean and tidy.
[常用顺承句式]
Take Beijing for example, it is one of the biggest cities in the world. What is more serious is that we don't cherish wildlife.
As far as I am concerned, they stand for love, friendship and unity. [满分作文选粹]
What's more, it is big enough to hold all the teachers and students in our school.(2024·全国卷Ⅲ书面表达)
What I want to stress is that our group is looking for new members right now.(2024·天津高考书面表达)
In addition, there are famous artists who will perform how to cut paper on the
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