扩充要点，使用恰当连词，连句成文
1. 表示时间顺序：first/firstly, second/secondly, third/thirdly, then, after that, finally等。 2. 表示递进关系：besides, also, What’s more等。
3. 表示因果关系：because, so, therefore, as a result, thanks to 等。 4. 表示转折关系：but, yet, however, while等。 5. 表示条件关系：if, unless, as long as, so long as等。
6. 过渡性插入语：generally speaking, I think, in other words, in a word等。 【范文】
May 18th cloudy
In the morning, my alarm clock didn't ring so I woke up an hour late. I was in such a hurry that I burnt my hand when I was cooking breakfast. Then I ran out of the house to catch the 8:30 bus, but of course I missed it.
I was very unhappy because I knew my teacher got angry if anyone was late for class. So I ran three miles to the school. But when I arrived there in the end, I found that it was Sunday.
练习 : 李萍在上学路上拾到一个钱包。请根据以下六幅图写一篇短文，词数100左右。 参考词：名片 a calling card 回报 reward
审图，准备词汇： do a good deed 做好事 wallet n. 钱包 owner n. 主人 calling card 名片 address n. 地址
telephone number 电话号码 public adj. 公共的 reward vt. 回报 politely adj. 有礼貌的 refuse vt. 拒绝
1. 注意审题， 确定要点: 1. see a wallet 2. calling card 名片
3. find money and a calling card 4. call the owner 5. wait at the bus stop 6. owner came
7. do a good deed 做好事 8. address n. 地址
9. telephone number电话号码 10. public adj. 公共的 11. reward vt. 回报 12. politely adj. 有礼貌的 13. refuse vt. 拒绝
题材：记叙文 人称：第三人称 时态：一般过去时 1. Li Ping saw a wallet.
写句子：Yesterday on her way to school, Li Ping saw a wallet on the ground near the bus stop. 2. She found a lot of money and a calling card in it.
写句子：She opened the wallet. She found a lot of money and a calling card in it. 3. She called the owner.
3. From the calling card, she knew the owner’s name, address and telephone number. She thought the owner must be very worried. _______ She went to a public telephone. _________She called the owner. (So she ; and she) 4. She waited at the bus-stop.
5. The owner came by taxi very soon. Li Ping gave the wallet to her.
6. The owner took out a 100-yuan note to reward her.
6. The owner was ____ thankful to her. _________The owner took out a 100-yuan note to reward her. ____ Li Ping politely refused her. ______ She went to school happily. (so/ that she/ But/ and)
请找出优点和错误
Li Ping did good deed yesterday. On her way to home, she saw a wallet lay on the ground near the bus stop. She opened the wallet and found lot of money and a calling card in it. From the calling card, she knew the owner’s name, address and telephone number.
So she went to a public telephone and called on the owner. Then she waited at the bus stop. When the owner got to, Li Ping gave the wallet to her. The owner was very thankful to Li Ping that she took out a 100-yuan note to reward her. However, Li Ping politely refused her and went home happily.
What a good girl she is ! 请找出优点和错误
Li Ping did ① good deed yesterday. On her way ② to home, she saw a wallet ③ lay on the ground near the bus stop. She opened the wallet and found ④ lot of money and a calling card in it. From the calling card, she knew the owner’s name, address and telephone number.
⑤ So she went to a public telephone and ⑥ called on the owner. Then she waited at the bus stop. When the owner ⑦ got to, Li Ping gave the wallet to her. The owner was ⑧ very thankful to Li Ping that she took out a 100-yuan note to reward her. ⑨ However, Li Ping politely refused her and went home happily.
⑩ What a good girl she is !
点评:
②On her way to home改为On her way to school与题目“在上学的路上”保持一致。 ③改lay为lying, 构成现在分词短语作宾语补足语。 ④a lot of = lots of 是一个固定词组，不可更改。 ⑤这里So用得好, 起承上启下的作用。
⑥call on sb. 拜访某人。“给某人打电话”可用call sb.。
⑦get to 是有“到达”的意思，但当其后没有地点名词时不需要带介词to。这里got to可以改为arrived。
①deed是可数名词，表达“做一件好事”，英语为do a good deed。
⑧very改为so，构成so…that; ⑩结尾特别好，前后呼应，总结全文。 【范文】
书写规范： 书写要“横对齐，竖平行。”
Li Ping did a good deed yesterday. On her way to school, she saw a wallet lying on the ground near the bus stop. She opened the wallet and found a lot of money and a calling card in it. From the calling card, she knew the owner’s name, address and telephone number.
So she went to a public telephone and called the owner. Then she waited at the bus stop. When the owner arrived, Li Ping gave the wallet to her. The owner was so thankful to Li Ping that she took out a 100-yuan note to reward her. However, Li Ping politely refused her and went to school happily.
What a good girl she is !
总 结
做英语书面表达题要做到以下几点： 注意审题，确定要点。 扩展要点，连句成篇。 全面检查，书写规范。
为了让书面表达得高分，我们须使写好的书面表达尽量具有如下六大特性。 1.条理性。 2.准确性。 3.流畅性。 4.简洁多样性。 5.思想性。 6.美观性。
⑨went home改为went to school与题目“在上学的路上”保持一致；这里However用得很好。
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