微技能四 动作和神情描写
动作和神情描写是读后续写描述事件的最重要的描写方式。动作和神情描写要围绕续写文章的主题而设计,不要漫无边际的发挥。文中的动作和神情描写要侧重描述事件的过程和细节,使故事连贯流畅。 描写时要着重身体动作描写,这样才能把文中人物描述的栩栩如生。描写时要多用具体性词汇,不要过多地用笼统性词汇,这样才能使故事更加形象生动。描写动作和神情时可以增添形容词、副词和介词短语等,使动作更加具体,表达更加到位。
语言输入——素材积累,为续写奠基
Ⅰ.词汇积累
1.climb v.攀登,爬 2.shrug v. 耸肩 3.spread v. 伸开,展开 4.nod v. 点头 5.run v. 跑 6.smell v. 闻,嗅 7.water v. 流口水 8.head v. 前往 9.kiss v. 亲吻
10.raise v. 举起;使升高 11.stand up 站起身
12.walk gracefully 步态优美地走
13.a walk across the fields 穿过田野的散步 14.give a murmur of approval 低声表示赞同 15.say sth deliberately 故意地说 16.jump to one’s feet 一跃而起 17.make one’s first appearance 首次露面 18.cast a hasty glance at sb 朝某人匆匆瞥了一眼 19.cast an admiring glance at sb 向某人投以爱慕的目光
20.gaze up at the stars 凝望着天上的星星 21.look at sb with a fixed gaze 凝视着某人
22.throw a curious glance at sth 好奇地向某人看了一眼 23.hear the thunder rolling in the distance 听到远处的隆隆雷声
24.praise sb (up)to the skies 极力称赞、大肆吹捧某人 25.never hear anything against sb 从未听说过反对某人的话 26.recognize sb at first hearing 一听到声音就知道是某人 27.break into shouts of applause 爆发出阵阵喝彩声 28.listen impatiently 不耐心地听 29.pace back and forth 来回踱步
30.stroll about/around/through the town 在城里闲逛 31.walk across a street 步行穿过马路 32.walk arm in arm 臂挽着臂走
33.walk through the pouring rain 在倾盆大雨中走 34.wander into the woods 漫步向树林里走去 35.wander over the countryside 在乡间漫步 Ⅱ.佳句背诵
1.His head drooped and tears fell into his lap. 他耷拉着脑袋,眼泪滴落在大腿上。 2.He had a slight frown on his face. 他的脸上呈现出有点儿愁眉不展的样子。 3.They walked hand in hand along the path. 他们手拉手沿着小路走。
4.She rested her head on his shoulder. 她将头靠在他的肩膀上。
【温馨提示】 更多动作和神情描写佳句见P172“语料积累”。
语言输出——层级训练,让续写添彩
Ⅰ.基础练习——补全句子
1.My mouth started__watering when I smelled the food. 闻到食物的香味,我开始流口水了。 2.She opened__her__mouth to say something. 她张开嘴要说什么。
3.She took the child’s hand and helped__him__climb__the__steps.她拉住孩子的手牵着他爬上台阶。
4.She shrugged__and__spread__her__hands.“That’s all I can tell you.” 她耸耸肩,摊开双手说:“我只能告诉你这么多了。” 5.He snapped__his__fingers and the waiter came__running. 他打了个响指,侍者跑了过来。
Ⅱ.综合演练——完成读后续写,注意动作描写
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Robert and Henry were two friends in the same class.They always played together and went home together.One day Robert and Henry were going home from school, when, on turning a corner, Robert cried out, “A fight! Let’s go and see!”
“No,” said Henry.“Let us go home quietly and not meddle with(插手)this quarrel.We have nothing to do with it and may get into mischief(trouble).Also our parents are expecting to have dinner with us together at home and I don’t want them to worry about me.”
“You are a coward, and afraid to go,” said Robert, and off he ran.Henry went straight home, and in the afternoon went to school as usual.
But Robert had told all the boys that Henry was a coward, and they laughed at him a great deal.From then on, they looked down upon Henry and didn’t want to play with him together.
Henry was sad but he wasn’t angry with Robert for his rude behavior, because he learned that true courage is shown most in bearing misunderstanding when it was not deserved, and that he ought to be afraid of nothing but doing wrong.Thus, he just ignored the other boys’ laughter and continued to go to school and study as well.However, Robert didn’t invite Henry to go home with him anymore.Instead, he
had some other boys who also thought Henry was a coward.Every day after school, they didn’t go home directly but went to the river or somewhere to play games and had a lot of fun.
A few days later, Robert was bathing with his new friends in a river, and got out of his depth.He struggled, and screamed for help, but all in vain.The boys who had called Henry a coward got out of the water as fast as they could, but they did not even try to help him.
【根据提示完成范文】 Paragraph 1:
Robert was fast sinking. It seemed as if Robert would be drowned.Just at the moment, Henry
happened
to
be
passing
by.Hearing
the
screams,
Henry
①ran__to__the__riverside,__threw__off__his__clothes__and__jumped__into__the__water (跑向河边,脱掉衣服,跳进河里)without hesitation.He ②reached__Robert (伸手够向罗伯特)just as he was sinking the last time.With great effort, and with much danger to himself, he ③brought__Robert__to__the__shore(把Robert带到岸边).
Paragraph 2:
Thus, Robert’s life was saved.Robert and his new friends were ashamed at having called Henry a coward.They realized that Henry had true courage.They ④said__sorry__to__Henry (向Henry道歉)for their rude behavior and asked for his forgiveness.Henry forgave them happily.He and Robert were friends again and they ⑤went__home__together__as__usual(和往常一样一起回家).From this, Robert learned what true courage was: never be afraid to do good, but always fear to do evil.
高中英语读后续写与概要写作 微技能四 动作和神情描写
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