写作训练
请以记者的身份,根据案件登记卡所提供的情况，用英语写一篇新闻报导稿。字数：120左右 案件信息 时间 地点 天气 昨天下午四点五十分, 银行关门前 公园路一家银行 大雨, 道路通畅 事件: 目击者讲两个带面罩的年轻人用枪威胁银行职员, 携两百万美金逃跑. 没有人受伤或遇害.警察正在搜查这两名抢劫犯.
英语作文“六步法”教学
Step1． 仔细审题 Step2. 理清要点 Step3. 译写单句 Step4. 连句成篇 Step5. 检查润色
每句话写好后，用适当的连词接起来，使之上下连贯，呼应，通顺，简洁。 适当地用一些高级词汇短语和句式
检查一下有没有时态，语态，拼写错误并逐一加以改正 Step6. 定稿誊写卷面整洁干净
Step1:仔细审题
这是一篇新闻报道, 主要是讲公园路发生的一起抢劫. 注意有时间,人物,时间,地点,天气。 涉及到的词汇有: robber, robbery, rob, little traffic, eyewitness, threaten, clerk, injure, search for. 字数: 120左右
Step2：理清要点
1. 抢劫发生在昨天下午四点五十,银行关门前。
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2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 银行位于公园路。
当时在下大雨,道路通畅。
目击者陈述抢劫犯是2名戴面罩的年轻人,他们用枪威胁职员,抢走了2百万美元。 抢劫中无人受伤或遇害。 警察正在搜寻他们。
Step3：译写单句
? A robbery happened at 4:50 p.m. yesterday before the bank was closed.
? The bank was in the Park Street.
? It was raining heavily and there was little traffic on the road.
? The eyewitness said that two robbers were two young men with masks, and they
threatened the clerks with guns. They robbed 2 million dollars.
? No one was injured or killed in the robbery.
? The police are searching for them.
Step4：连句成篇
A robbery happened at 4:50 p.m. yesterday before the bank was closed. The bank was in the Park Street. And it was raining heavily with little traffic on the road .The eyewitness said that suddenly two young men with masks rushed into the bank and threatened the clerks with guns. Then They robbed 2 million dollars. Luckily, no one was injured or killed in the robbery. The police are searching for them.
Step5：检查润色
Yesterday afternoon, a robbery happened in a bank in the Park Street.
According to the witnesses’ statements, it was at 4:50 pm, just before the closing time of the bank that the robbery happened. And it was raining heavily/ cats and dogs, with little traffic on the road outside. Suddenly, two young men with masks rushed in and threatened the clerks with guns. Then they rushed out and droved away with about 2,000,000 dollars. All the things lasted for only a few minutes.
Fortunately, there was nobody injured or killed in the robbery. Now the police are searching for the robbers, hoping whoever gets the connected information calls them up as soon as possible.
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Step6: 定稿誊写卷面整洁干净
学生习作中的典型语言错误： 一、张冠李戴
A band was rubbed.
At ten past five,….
A seewitness/ eyelook said that….
They took 2 billion dollars and ran away.
The police are researching for the two robbers.
二、画蛇添足
At 4:50 p.m. in the afternoon
The bank which in the Park street was robbed.
Two millions dollars
They will be caught as soon as in possible.
三、乱点鸳鸯
It was heavy raining.
What was luckily,
We should help the police with searching for the robbers.
四、缺胳膊少腿
Because the heavy rain and clear road, the two young men smoothly ran away.
The police are searching the two robbers.
五、瞻前不顾后
The two robbers were two young man.
The two young men with a mask broke into the bank.
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The police is trying their best to searching for the two robber.
英语写作主要错误：
一、单复数、人称、时态、语态和拼写 We’ll help the farm pick cottons.
Mr. Li is my good friend. She is active.
I’m sorry to say I fail in the last exam.
He found that something has stolen from his house.
二、中式英语
要减少汉式英语，必须做到：①尽量使自己养成用英语思维进行写作的习惯，注意中西文化差异带来的不同表达方式。②平时要归纳总结、纠正汉式英语。③广泛阅读，多收听英语广播、收看电视中的英语新闻节目等。
1) My home has a dog.
2) Though he was ill, but he went on working.
3) We find that to learn English well is difficult.
4) I think she can not swim.
5) Her age is very young.
6) He was married with Anna last month.
7) He has a lot of students go to college.
8) Learn English well is not easy.
9) There are many teachers taught me English.
10) I very like English.
[答案]
1)→My family has a dog./ We keep a dog at home.
2)→Though he was ill, he went on working./ He was ill, but he went on working. 3)→We find it difficult to learn English.
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4)→I don’t think she can swim. 5)→She is very young.
6)→He was married to Anna last month./ He married Anna last month. 7)→A lot of his students have gone to college.
8)→To learn/ Learning English well is not easy./ It’s not easy to learn English well.
9)→Many teachers have taught me English. 10)→I like English very much.
三、标点符号
书写英文句子时，不少学生常常误用标点符号。标点符号是一种变相文字，是书面语不可缺少的重要手段，同学们平时要比较英汉标点的差异，切莫等闲视之。 [误]Li Ping isn’t old enough, he can not join the army.
[正]Li Ping isn’t old enough. He can not join the army./ Li Ping isn’t old enough; he can not join the army.
[析]此句犯了两个或数个独立的句子用逗号断开的通病。
1) Mr Yu reads 《China Daily》every day.
2) Walk along this road, and take the second turning on the left。
3) His parents ran to him and asked what had happened?
4) I like Chinese、maths、history and English.
[答案]
1)去掉书名号。汉语中有书名号，但英语中没有。书写报刊、书名等时，常用报刊、书名的每个单词首字母大写，且常在文中用斜体或在名称下划一横线的形式表示。 2)空心圆点改为实心圆点。
3)句末问号改为句号，因为此为陈述句。 4)把顿号改为逗号，英语中没有顿号。
四、字母大小写
He said, “ my father has gone to Paris”.
五、词形变化
The car hitted the old man and drived away.
六、选词或搭配不当
Peter is a warm-hearted person, so everybody likes to have friends with him.
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高中英语 写作方法及写作中常见错误教案
