2024年高考英语 书面表达技法点拨 2.如何充实核心
【示例】
假设你是学生李华，你的家乡剪纸艺术负有盛名，你写了一篇英文宣传稿，想请外籍教师Bob帮助润色。请根据提示，用英语给Bob写一封求助信。内容包括：
1．求助事由； 2．求助内容； 3．表达感激。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．信的格式已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Bob，
I'm writing in the hope that you will be kind enough to do me a favor.
Yours， Li Hua
One possible version：
Dear Bob，
I'm writing in the hope that you will be kind enough to do me a favor. When it comes
to papercutting，there is no denying that it enjoys a great reputation in my hometown.For a long time I have been longing to write an appealing article to make it better known.However，only when I put the idea into practice did I find that my English is far from satisfaction.
As far as I'm concerned，you have a good command of written English，which impresses me a lot.Would you like to do me a favor to have my draft polished？I will pay you a visit at your earliest convenience.
I would appreciate it if you could take my request into consideration.
Yours， Li Hua
【如何充实核心】
1．交叉使用长句与短句
在英语写作中，过多地使用长句或过多地使用短句都不好。正确的做法是，根据实际情况在文章中交替使用长句与短句，使文章显得错落有致，这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感，而且使文章读起来铿锵有力。
【典例】中午我们晒着太阳吃野餐。休息一会儿后，我们唱 歌的唱歌，跳舞的跳舞，还有的讲故事、下棋，大家玩得很开心。
一般句：
At noon we had a picnic in the sunshine. Then we had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. Some told stories. Some played chess.
优秀句：
At noon we had a picnic in the sunshine. After a short rest，we had great fun singing and dancing，telling stories and playing chess.
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2．避免同一词语的重复使用
为了使文章更生动、更富表现力，同学们在写作时应尽量避免重复使用同一词语来表示同一意思，尤其是一些老生常谈的词语。如有的同学一看到“喜欢”二字，就会立刻想起 like，事实上，英语中类似意思的词和短语很多，如 love，enjoy，prefer，appreciate，be fond of，care for 等。
【典例】我喜欢读书，而我的弟弟喜欢看电视。 一般句：
I like reading while my brother likes watching television. 优秀句：
I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television. 3．适当使用短语代替单词 【典例】他已决定长大了当老师。 一般句：
He has decided to be a teacher when he grows up. 优秀句：
He has made up his mind to be a teacher when he grows up. 4．恰当套用某些固定表达方式
【典例 1】他太累了，不能再往前走了。 一般句：
He was very tired. He couldn't walk any further. 优秀句：
He was too tired to walk any further.
【典例 2】生活中总有一些充满挑战性的事情。除了面对我 们别无选择。
There is always something challenging in our life. We have no choice but to face it. 5．灵活改变句子开头
在通常情况下，英语句子的排列方式为“主语＋谓语＋宾
语”，即主语位于句子开头。若根据情况适当改变句子的开头方式，比如使用倒装语序或以状语开头等，就会增强文章的表现力。
【典例】直到那时，我才意识到言语在积极方面和消极方面 都那么有影响力。
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一般句：
I didn't realize words could be so powerful in both positive and negative ways until then.
优秀句：
Not until then did I realize words could be so powerful in both positive and negative ways.
6．适当运用非谓语结构
非谓语结构通常被认为是一种高级结构，适当运用非谓语结 构，会给人一种熟练驾驭语言的印象。
【典例】听到这个消息他们都高兴得跳了起来。 一般句：
When they heard the news，they all jumped with joy. 优秀句：
Hearing the news，they all jumped with joy. 【举一反三】
(1)惊诧于他们的熟练程度，我决心要像他们一样好。
Because I was amazed at how skillful they were，I determined to be just as good. 用过去分词作状语将其转换为→Amazed at how skillful they were，I determined to be just as good.
(2)看到一辆车朝她飞驰而来，我伸出手把她拉了回来。
When I saw a car running towards her，I reached my hand out and pulled her back. 用现在分词作状语将其转换为→Seeing a car running towards her，I reached my hand out and pulled her back.
(3) 这里曾有一家生产化肥的工厂。它每天释放出大量有毒气 体，污染环境。
There was a factory here，which produced fertlizer. Every day it gave out a lot of poisonous gas，which polluted the environment.
将第二个定语从句转换为现在分词短语→There was a factory
here，which produced fertilizer. Every day it gave out a lot of poisonous gas，polluting the environment.
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7．合理安排句型
注意把意思相近、相似、互为补充的句子合为一个复杂句，使重点突出，并且要明确内在的逻辑关系。
一般句：
When it is my birthday，my mother will cook some dishes to celebrate my birthday，or she will give me some money to buy whatever I want.
优秀句：
To celebrate my birthday，mother always cooks some dishes or gives me some money to buy whatever I want.
改后的句子由两句变为一句，句意更易理解，逻辑更清楚。注意中文和英文两种语言结构上的差别。
(1)英文常用被动语态，而中文常用主动语态。 【典例】 明天讨论这个问题。
The problem will be discussed tomorrow.
(2)合理恰当地使用省略句，不仅可以使文章精炼、简洁，而 且会使文章更具文采和可读性。
【典例】 他可能很忙，要是这样，我以后再来拜访。要是不 忙，我现在可以见他吗？
一般句：
He may be busy. If he is busy，I will call later. If he is not busy，can I see him now? 优秀句：
He may be busy. If so，I will call later. If not，can I see him now? (3)恰当运用各种从句
【典例 1】如果他们在考试中经常作弊，他们就会养成一个 坏习惯，这将会对他们的生活产生坏的影响。
If they often cheat in the exams，they will develop a bad habit， and it will have a bad effect on their life. →If they often cheat in the exams，they will develop a bad habit， which will have a bad effect on their life.
【典例 2】这正是我所想要的。
It is just the thing I prefer. →It is just what I prefer.
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2024年高考英语 书面表达技法点拨 2.如何充实核心
