一、小试牛刀 【金山区】 88. Write at least 60 words about the topic “My opinion on remote lessons” （请以“我对远程课堂的看法”为题，写一篇不少于60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格。） 疫情期间我们开启了一种全新的学习模式--远程课堂（remote lessons）。在此期间你是如何学习的？请结合你自身经历，谈谈对远程课堂的看法。 （注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名以其他相关信息，否则不予评分。） The following is for reference only.(以下表达仅供参考) ? because of the virus ? manage time ? self-control ? effective 优秀范文： My opinion on remote lessons We Chinese students have to have remote lessons at home because of the virus. As far as I’m concerned, having remote lessons is convenient and makes us avoid contacting each other. During that moment, teachers arranged our time well enough to make every student study more efficiently at home. I also took full use of my leisure time to learn my poor subject---Maths. When I was in need, I also used QQ or Wechat to ask my teachers for help and they could help me instantly. Teachers also made PPT in class so that we could get effective knowledge. However, sometimes my self-control was not enough, so my parents always reminded me that I must spend more time studying when I was at home so that I could be admitted into an ideal high school. Therefore, as long as every student can control himself or herself, taking remote lessons can also help us learn more. 1
二、模块精讲 中考写作标准 内容8分（前提，最重要）+语言8分+组织结构4分 中考写作标准（实际情况是阅卷老师会先分档，在具体给分，内容语言15.16分才有组织结构分 1. 内容分8分 内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚完整 2. 语言分8分 学生需用语规范，表达准确，无或少见语法错误，词汇拼写正确，句型使用恰当。首先是字数，少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。 (字数不够，每少10个扣0.5，语法错误一个扣0.5，同一个语法错误不重复扣分，句子错误扣分不超过1分。 字数80—100最好 中等生 字数100—120 优等生 写得越多，错的可能性越大，所以风险也很大 上海每年中考英语满分作文也就5-6篇) 3. 组织结构4分 也就是我们常说的文采分。根据学生使用复杂句型/单词和谚语/俗语的情况来加分。 知识点一内容(理论介绍)（符合题目要求的议论文体裁） 摘要：议论文是作者对某个问题或某件事进行分析、评论，表明自己的观点、立尝态度、看法和主张的一种文体。议论文有三要素，即论点、论据和论证。论点的基本要求是：观点正确，认真概括，有实际意义；论据的基本要求是：真 议论文是作者对某个问题或某件事进行分析、评论，表明自己的观点、立场、态度、看法和主张的一种文体。议论文有三要素，即论点、论据和论证。论点的基本要求是：观点正确，认真概括，有实际意义；论据的基本要求是：真实可靠，充分典型；论证的基本要求是：推理必须符合逻辑。 基本要求： 1。书写整洁、卷面清晰！ 2。论点要明确，论据要充分！ 3。分段！标点！大小写！ 4。格式正确！ 5。不遗漏要点！ 步骤： 审题-谋篇-写作-检查 在具体写作中要注意下列几点： 1. 议题的提出要开门见山，不要拖泥带水。 2. 议论时可以采用不同的方法。如：可以摆出正反两方面观点，进行对比；也可引经据典论证作者自己观点的正确性，从而使读者接受自己的观点；亦可提出一种错误的观点然后论证其错误，最终提出正确的观 2
点。正文部分是写作的重点，论证方法可用归纳法、推理法、比较法等。 3. 在结论部分必须表明作者的观点，对讨论的问题做出总结。 4. 注意连接词和过渡词等词语的使用，以增强文章的条理性和逻辑性。常用的过渡词和连接词包括： first, second, third, finally, in addition, furthermore, besides, what was worse, more importantly, in contrast, because, since, now that, therefore，consequently，in that case, as a result/consequence, in conclusion, to sum up等等。 英语议论文的结构一般较为固定，通常包括以下三部分： 1. 在导语部分提出需要议论的议题； 2. 在正文部分对所提出的问题进行议论； 3. 在结论部分对以上的讨论进行总结和归纳。 写议论文要考虑论点，考虑用什么作论据来证明，怎样来论证，然后得出结论。它可以是先提出一个总论点，然后分别进行论述，分析各个分论点，最后得出结论；或者先引述一个故事，一段对话，或描写一个场面，再一层一层地从事实中分析出道理，归纳引申出一个新的结论；也可以在文章开头先提出一个人们关心的问题，然后一一作答，逐层深入；还可以把两个不同事物以对立的方式提出来加以比较、对照，然后得出结论。 作文框架 1. Introduction---topic introduction 2. Body part: evidence to support your idea (用论据说明自己的观点) 3.Conclusion (结论) –-- personal opinion (state or restate your idea ) 结论(重申自己的观点, 呼应前文) 第一招之精彩开头 Introduction (开头)： 1) Nowadays , … play a more and more important role in our daily life. 2) Should ……? Different people have different opinions on the issues of … 3) Recently we had a heated discussion on… Opinions are various among different people. 3
（升级变身） 4) Currently, the issue of xxx has been brought to public attention. People hold different views about it. Some people hold that ~ while others point out that ~ 5) xxx has become a hot topic among people, especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way. 6) xxx has been playing an increasingly important role in our daily life. It has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well. 第二招之观点论证 Body(正文)： 1. Some may hold the view that… because / firstly.. (有些人认为…) But others have a negative/opposite attitude. From their point of view,… (有些人却持有不同的观点, 他们认为…) 2. some people are against the idea of … because …. while others are for the idea of … 3. I As far as am concerned , I hold the view that… 4. I totally agree with the statement that … 5. Personally , I support the idea that… The reasons are presented below. (我的观点是…, 论据如下…) 用好过渡连接词 1“启”：first of all,______________________________ 2.“承”：secondly,______________________________ 3.“转”：however,______________________________ 4. “合” ：finally，______________________________ 逻辑连接词的正确使用 1) (表顺序) Firstly…(in the first place/ first of all/to begin with/ to start with); secondly…; thirdly…; 4
the last but not the least; finally/ at last/ in the end 2) (表递进) what is more/in addition/additionally/furthermore/moreover (另外), what is worse(更糟糕的是…), 3) (表比较) on one hand…, on the other hand, on the contrary 4) 表事实：in fact/ as a matter of fact/actually/as a result, it is known to all 5) 表列举：such as, for example, for instance, in other words, anyway 6) 表层次：on one hand, on the other hand, for one thing, for another to one’s joy/ surprise, 7) 表观点：in my opinion/view/mind ,from my point of view,according to me, As far as I know/As far as I am concerned 8) 表总结：in a word, all in all, to conclude, in conclusion, to sum up , 9) 表转折：however, while 10) 表因果：therefore, thus, as a result 其他：needless to say, generally speaking, to be frank, believe it or not, in order to do something, so that 第三招之完美结尾 Conclusion (结论)： 1. Taking all these factors into consideration, we may reach/draw the conclusion that… 2. Therefore, it is easy to draw/come to the conclusion that … 3. To sum up / in a word / in conclusion /in short/ above all/ in general/ generally speaking, I still hold the view that… 4. Finally, I would conclude by saying that ~ 5. Therefore, we’d better come to the conclusion that ~ （升级变身） 6. To sum up, we should make use of the advantages and deduce the disadvantages at the same time. 5
2024学年上海中考冲刺讲义10-议论文写作
