to heal the wounded and rescue the dying, devoting myself to my work.
Best wishes!
Yours, Li Jin
【解析】
这是一篇应用文,要求写一封信。
第一步:审题。审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过审题我们可以确定几个方面的信息。第一,假如你是晨光中学的李津。你校于6月8号举办了成人礼活动,你的英国朋友Chris 很想了解该活动。你于当晚给Chris 回一封电子邮件,介绍相关情况,内容包括:(1)成人礼活动内容(成长点滴回顾,观看校友抗疫事迹录像等)2. 对活动的感受。3. 对自己未来的展望。第二,人称为第一人称。第三,时态为一般现在时,一般过去时和一般将来时。
第二步:布局段落,确定主要段落,次要段落,段落数量。这篇写作段落数量为三段。第一段:成人礼活动内容(成长点滴回顾,观看校友抗疫事迹录像等)。第二段:对活动的感受;对自己未来的展望。第三段,表达期望。
第三步:确定关键词汇和短语:congratulate sb on sth., be faced with, heal the wounded and rescue the dying, devote oneself to doing sth.;
第四步:确定较为高级的句子:that引导的定语从句和现在分词作状语During the coming-of-age ceremony, the headmaster congratulated us on stepping into the adult, reviewing the growth period that we had experienced. that引导的表语从句Through the activity, what I felt is that I am able to shoulder the responsibility and make us stronger and more determined.时间状语从句的省略句When faced with the difficulties and failures, I must overcome them. 第五步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接:After that, besides, however. 第六步:注意书写,保持卷面整洁,避免划线,乱擦。 【点睛】
文章思路清晰,语言规范,段落整齐,语篇连贯,层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:that引导的定语从句和现在分词作状语During the coming-of-age ceremony, the headmaster congratulated us on stepping into the adult, reviewing the growth period that we had experienced. that引导的表语从句Through the activity, what I felt is that I am able to shoulder the responsibility and make us stronger and more determined.时间状语从句的省略句When faced with the difficulties and failures, I must overcome them.等高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次,整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
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