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新高考读后续写高分素材--微技能之细节描写
读后续写 微技能之细节描写1
高考中续写的文体主要为记叙文。顾名思义，记叙文主要以记叙事件为主，因此需要用到许多的细节描写以使文章生动，言之有物。不少学生语言功底不错，但是续写始终得不了高分，其中一个原因可能就是细节描写的缺乏。
那么，续写该如何写呢？我们应该做到兼顾概括描述和细节描述，而且要多用细节描述。所谓概括描述是指对一个事件的总体描述，而细节描述则是对事件的具体描述，来对之前的总体描述进一步解释说明，这样能够使得描述更加生动，有画面感。
举例：
如表达一个人的疲累时，可用概括描述：she felt exhausted. 同时辅以细节描述She felt exhausted and sat by the stream, resting her aching feet.
如果大家注意这些细节的描述，一定会为你的记叙文续写增色！ “感到害怕”的细节描述
当看到那只凶恶的狼时，我感到很害怕。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 ______________________________________
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
1.At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I felt very scared.
2. 1）At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I felt so scared that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak. (嗓子发紧，膝盖发软)
2）At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch.(吓呆了，不敢动弹)
3）At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating. (被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗)
表感到兴奋 thrilled
当主持人宣布她获奖时，她兴奋极了。
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1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 _____________________________________
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
1.When the host announced that she won the prize, she felt thrilled.
2. 1) When the host announced that she won the prize, her eyes twinkled with excitement.（激动得两眼放光）
2) When the host announced that she won the prize, her heart was thumping with excitement. (激动得心砰砰跳)
3) When the host announced that she won the prize, a wide excitement took hold of her. (兴奋不能自已)
感到悲伤”的细节描述 一听到那个坏消息，她悲伤不已。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 _____________________________________
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
1. Upon hearing the bad news, she felt extremely sad.
2. 1）Upon hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks. (心痛，眼泪直流)
2）Upon hearing the bad news, she, numb with grief, had trouble speaking. (悲伤到失去知觉，不能开口说话)
3）Upon hearing the bad news, she felt seized by a burst of sadness and couldn’t help crying bitterly.(被一股悲伤之感控制，忍不住哭泣)
“感到开心”的细节描述 当妈妈亲吻他时，小baby开心极了。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 ______________________________________
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2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
1.When his mother kissed him on the cheek, the baby was happy/delighted/full of joy. 2.1) When his mother kissed him on the cheek, it seemed as if the baby were on top of the world. (非常开心)
2) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his face beamed and his bright smile lit up the room. (眉开眼笑；笑容照亮房间)
3) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his eyes danced with joy and sweetness. (欢欣雀跃)
\感到羞愧\的细节描述 她感到非常羞愧。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。
___________________________________________________________________________ (答案见底部Key 1)
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1）_________________________________________________________________________ 2）_________________________________________________________________________ 3）_________________________________________________________________________ (答案见底部Key 2) 参考答案：
Key 1: She felt ashamed. Key 2:
1) She felt so ashamed that she could feel her face burning.(脸上滚烫) 2) So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face. (血液涌上脸颊)
3) So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears. (快哭了)
“感到生气”的细节描述 Sheldon感到非常生气。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 ______________________________________
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。
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1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
Key 1: Sheldon felt very angry. Key 2:
1) Sheldon felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him. (冲出房间；狠狠摔门)
2) Boiling with rage, Sheldon shook his fist at me.(怒火中烧；挥舞拳头)
3) Filled with fury, Sheldon was unable to utter a single word. (充满愤怒；说不出话)
“感到绝望”的细节描述 Tony感到很绝望。
1、大家可以先尝试用概括描述，先将意思表达清楚。 ______________________________________
2、请你在此概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 1） _______________________________________ 2） _______________________________________ 3） _______________________________________ 参考答案：
Key 1: Tony felt hopeless/desperate. Key 2:
1) As the result of an accident, Tony was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness. (被投入黑暗之中；陷入绝望)
2) Tony felt left out and was getting desperate with loneliness. (感觉被遗忘、忽视)
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“人的行走之态”细节描述 1、踉踉跄跄
________________________________________ 2、悄悄地走
________________________________________ 3、猛冲
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________________________________________ (答案见底部) Keys:
1. The player lost his balance, staggered back and toppled over. 这个运动员失去了平衡，向后趔趄摔倒了。
2. She slipped out of bed and tiptoed to the window. 她溜下床，踮起脚尖走向窗户。3. The minion made a rush for the door and escaped from the scene. 小黄人向门冲去，逃离了现场。
人的说话方式”细节描述
说话的方式多种多样，如果都用talk就显得索然无味，也不够准确，所以要多积累各种各样的表达。
1、说长道短；八卦
________________________________________ 2、小声咕哝
________________________________________ 3、嚎叫
________________________________________ (答案见底部) Keys:
1. The whole company is gossiping about the reason for his dismissal. 整个公司都在谈论他被免职的原因。
2. He murmured against the strict rules of the reality show. 他私下低声抱怨真人秀的严苛规则。
3. Treated so unfairly, she howled in pain and anger. 被如此不公正地对待，她痛苦而又愤怒的嚎叫。
细节描述之“思考”
如何表达一个人暗自思索时的样子对学生来说是很困难的，大多数情况下，学生往往会选择避开，但是，人无时无刻不在思考，强行避开会使得故事内容上有些不衔接。所以，今天我们就一起来学习一下如何表达一个人的思考神态。
1. 得知问题所在之后，他的大脑开始急速运转，想要想出一个好的解决方案。 ________________________________________________ 2. 独自一人时，他总是会想到那可怕的经历。 ________________________________________________
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新高考读后续写高分素材--微技能之细节描写
